Writing a stream of consciousness for a character in a single, long sentence; the way David Malouf so elegantly does in his novel “Fly Away Peter”.

Write a long sentence that matches the way that David Malouf enters into a character’s consciousness. Introduce the sentence with a short sentence so that your reader knows what or who you are trying to dramatize.

This was actually more challenging than I initially thought it would be

This character has the desire to leave where she is and be with someone she misses who is far away on another continent.

She stared out over the ocean, incomprehensibly vast, rough, and wild, straining her eyes as if she could see all the way to the land mass she knew lay in that general direction, thousands of miles away, as the urge to fly there herself – to sprout wings like the seabirds soaring and diving above – grew into a great yearning that she felt within the depths of her very soul; if only it were possible, if only.

 

 

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